Apollo, Faster as a Cheetah and hurts just as much [reworked build]

i thought physical power with some speed would do ok and thats how i lv stuff

wowwowwow! Why are we not finishing items before moving on again?

Once again i say thank you, for i never heard of BBcode, but now it seems simple enough, thank you Sanguis, adn also thanks for proof reading

Let me state I don't want you to take this personally, but in order for you to improve this I'm going to have to hit you with the hard truth... and there's quite a bit of it.

Starting off, your introduction is lacking. I almost feel that if all your going to say is a pre-thank you, then nix the section and add it to the first informative section. However, you can make your introduction a bit better by adding a quite summary of who you are, why you selected this God, maybe add in what you added (when you update the guide).

I'm typically not critical of how someone builds a God because I have some funky builds myself, but I really recommend you nix the midas boots. It appears that you sell them after buying 2 additional items to pick up an even stranger choice: reinforced grieves. As Apollo, your probably going to be the ADC located in duo/long lane. I feel you're going to need all the firepower you can get. I recommend you pick up boots with some power to them. winged wand is strange, but I'll chalk that one up to personal taste, but ditch the boots. midas boots are a terrible choice unless your support in duo lane where your gold/minute is typically lower because your trying to allow your ADC (YOU) last hits.

Even the most novice user of this site understands: "Thia skill order is my perfered order, but i would upgrade accordingly." However, I would like to see a little more depth to these abilities. Talk to me like I've never picked this God up before. I have no idea how these abilities factor in to real gameplay. Just because I read the description from when I hover over the ability doesn't mean I fully understand what it does or is capable of. You do, so explain it to me. Give me your take on how to use the ability and how to combo it up with your other abilities.

Notice I underlined Thia in the previous paragraph. I took that directly from your guide. It's not the only spelling mistake I found either. Here are some other examples:

• "Now late game, sell those midas boots and get reinforced greves,..."
• "...18% in combat with some defence.Now buy..." (this has two mistakes. 1)defense 2) place a space after a punctuation (you made this mistake a few times))
• "...increase.The you buy rage..." (space again after punctuation, plus I think you meant then. context clues)

I understand publishing a guide that has little to no BBCode (I'll be getting to that) or shabby content, but please for the love of God...use your spell check. I'm almost certain this website has a built in spell check. If not download Google Chrome and it'll tell you when you've typed things incorrectly. Also, proof read everything you write. You used words that weren't meant to be there (example 3), but they were still spelled correctly and spell check wouldn't have caught that. I think it's pretty important to make sure your guide is legible. I shouldn't have to try and guess which word you meant to spell when browsing through your guide. It hurts your credibility.

You've probably never heard of BBCode, but it can greatly improve your guide. Please click this. It will teach you the basics of guide making and get you started down the path of using BBCode.

This is really rough, but I understand it's your first guide. It's the only thing keeping me from down voting this for the time being, but I will check back to see if you've taken the advice and make my decision then. Don't be afraid to PM me with any questions you have. I'm quick to respond and can help with just about anything you can think of. Take a peek at what I've created here. I don't mind if you use it as a base point to improve your guide. Don't forget to credit those who've helped you and any ideas you've taken from others. It's probably the most important thing.

Sincerely,
Sanguis

You make it sound like I gave you plans to a death ray. :P

Thnk you Chiulin, i will use this to my advantage

I REALLY like what you did in the pros and cons. I just want to say that first. Giving the downside to every upside. That's genius.

Next I want to say. I mastered Apollo then never used him again. So I'm not going to argue about your item choices. I'm just going to give you tips on making the guide itself better.

First: Add situationals. Make 3 or 4 items part of the "core build". Then make something like the last 2 or 3 dependent on what the enemy composition is. Also, you only list one active. What happens when they want the second active? They have no guidance there.

Second: Your reasons for picking items are literally just. I pick midas boots, because they give extra gold and movement speed. You are just describing the items attributes. That's not a REASON to pick an item. Try something more along the lines of. "midas boots are my first choice, because. The movement speed is necessary and as the game progresses getting ahead in items is a key to winning". That's a reason to buy them.

Third: You tell people to upgrade accordingly when it comes to skills. You NEED to explain what you mean. If I have NEVER used Apollo, then how am I supposed to know which ones are more important and when.

Fourth: (I feel like I'm ranting, sorry.) There is NOOOOOOOOO gameplay. Imagine you had never played this game, or used Apollo. You have the build. You're still going to suck, because you don't know what to do. Explain the laning phases and all that other **** for whatever game mode this is made for. I don't play conquest, because. I don't like playing for an hour in one game. So don't know much there.

Fifth: There is absolutely no BBcoding in this guide. Please add. It will get rid of the text walls and make the guide way more appealing to your reader's.

Hope this helped. Good luck.